Donmai

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I won't say this was a complete waste of time, as the first and second chapter are rather well done outside of a few hiccups.
I also got very cute faces and pages out of it.
But this last one didn't just make the story pointless, it dumped a ton of boring exposition (with admittedly good shots of a tall Eiki) and then all of a sudden it jumps to the ending with enough speed to break any immersion or interest, not that what happened would have held up anyway.
If pages 34 and 35 weren't numbered I would swear that a whole chapter was missing from the pool betweem them.

I got the impression that the artist simply got tired of the story and tried to wrap it up with a word dump and a quick "battle" scene.
I'm sure the ending is the same that was originally thought of, too bad it was executed so sloppily as the other two chapters showed to have a clear structure and hold up even on their own.

I wish more artists took the Zounose approach and just built their own Gensokyo with the framework that ZUN made and left full of holes for the fans to fill in.

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    ziin1234 said:

    Just in case anyone wants their review to go more direct, here's the pixiv source for this work (it's from 2018 though, so it's probably a bit late)

    Personally, I must advise against coming from a site where an artist's work has been pirated to leave angry google-translated comments on said work.

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    Nice story, kinda okay ending. It's like the Hero's journey except without the "gift" being granted near the end of the adventure. The ending climax appeared to be rushed but eh, I'm no artist so I'm not judging. I feel bad for Yoshika... and fuck you Seiga. not just because of your Jiangshi shenanigans but you being a general asshole and all.

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    I wonder how hungry Kal was for her to have some food around her mouth and STILL be drooling.

    P.S.: Kal STILL has eyebags.

    PS.S.: Every time Folinic interacts with Warfie, her blood pressure rises and we can see her veins popping up.

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    Kenji-san said:

    Keep my teacher's name out your f@cking mouth! -Louisa "Folinic" Smith

    I'm still confused as to why Will Smith wasn't immediately kicked out of the event after assaulting that bloke in broad daylight. Instead, TV tried to cover it up.
    Too bad that ultimately, that loser went white knight for nothing, she still hates him.

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    Jnglmpera said:

    Broke: Draw TBR in his heyday to reference just how good looking their shared jockey was in his hey day

    Woke: Draw Gaia Force so modern audiences know who rode them IRL

    Stoke: Marvel at how much of a First Class Gamer King Halo is. :DogeKek:

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